Dear reader I got a comment that really had me thinking. So I read all the previous chapters to see if there was a problem.The comment was right.
The pacing and tone of this story did a complete 180 flip.
These characters had changed too much in this short amount of time. Ralof went from a tired warrior to a gluttony filled man who's constantly eating food.
The Dragonborn went from a main character guy to a sugar addict like how do those two traits correlate at all.
I also dumb down croc even though in the first two chapters I made his character introduction all about him being calculating.
So I decided to rewrite this story. The pacing will be more slow. The tone of this story will be much more intense and serious with real consequences to actions. The power scaling will much more realistically to the story. So no attacks that would split the sky or all this conqueror haki bullshit I made. Those things will never appear in my new revise except for the conqueror haki thing but it start small and only after they killed a dragon and absorb its soul